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Vanilla Cranes

The light of day cuts pretty masks
Out of stuff way too colourful
And glues them on faces of men
Who then stomp chessboard with their feet

In brothels red lanterns do shine
Gates there kept open, welcoming
Children to find their way back home
To the tower of Babylon

Pockets and wallets resonate
With choirs and gospels of the change
Dreaming of freedom and revenge
Who lives by coin, by coin shall die

You ask me "Why do birds have wings,
When sons of mortal men can fly...?"
I guess we humans aim too high
Before sun laughs us in the face

So is there any happy place
Except for our enchanted realm
Where love with smallest ray of hope
Warms time through magnifying glass?

Here kisses taste like vanilla
Sprinkled all over coffee beans;
If we fold enough paper cranes
Do you think we can save the world?
once he asked me who I thought would win the fight over our world, our souls - good or evil? I said in my opinion it would depend on who'd try harder... it's not enough to say one would like to live in a better world, life's what we make it, the responsibility is ours
as to paper cranes - they are believed to make wishes come true - if you wish for something while folding a crane, it should happen :iconcocoloveplz:



inspired by my talks with :iconlovegoldplz: A H M A D and :iconlovegoldplz: C H E R Y L :iconartbycher:'s painting that she dedicated to John Lennon


kindly featured by :iconheartyellowplz: :iconchryssalis: :iconheartyellowplz: in her journal :bulletpink: [link] :bulletpink:

and by :iconheartyellowplz: :iconteaphotography: :iconheartyellowplz: in her journals :bulletpink: [link] :bulletpink: and :bulletpink: [link] :bulletpink:
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
I have never seen imagery quite like this before. Very well done! :)
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much, that's a big compliment :iconflowerforyouplz:
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vikingjon Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Professional General Artist
You are very observant in your thoughts and lyrical in your expressions. :heart:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, my friend :iconcuteflowerplz:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The images are striking and the concept is very much open to discussion. I really like this one.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you a lot, my rainbow :iconpeachplz: I'm trying to keep the poems complex; it seems to me recently I've been sensing life on more levels than before :iconbeatingheartplz:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Happy to hear that :)
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Professional
Love this. You have such a way with symbolism. A great rhythm to the voice in this work. The final stanza is brilliant. :D
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you M A R K :iconcuteblushplz:
when I share a new piece, I'm looking forward to hearing your opinion :nod: I'm happy you enjoy reading my poems
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
Nature would be worth saving... the nature of Mankind I'm not so sure.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:lmao: hahahaha, beautifully sarcastic! :clap:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Thought you would appreciate it! :D
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
indeed I do! a little badness is always good :nana:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012
Badness, where?!? :O Hehe!!
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
I sincerely hope we can save the world with the unfolding of paper cranes or wishing on shooting stars...it worries me the fate of the world, our enchanted realm. The last stanza was my favorite, though it's al beautiful. :glomp:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so very much :iconcocoheartplz:
I guess as long as the enchanted realm is safe, the world will also be
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
I hope so. I think the fairies and unicorns guard the enchanted realm. :iconelvenfae:
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ArtByCher Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
Bravo my little Sister!!! If you EVER want to download my work and put your type right on it it would be a honor! You suggest me one of your writing pieces to work of. And I must meet this Ahmed. I see him on FB quite a bit :D
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, that's a big compliment! thank you so much My Kitty :iconbouquetplz: I'd love to make a book with my poems and your paintings :iconladanceplz:
if you want to work with my writings, feel free to pick any you like...
A H M A D... I'm sure he'll like to meet you :iconhappysunplz:
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student Writer
Very beautiful, especially the last stanza :heart:
I'm on my way to folding 1000 cranes at the minute :love:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug: thank you, good fairy! :iconelvenfae:
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Student Writer
No problem lovely!! :love:
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Michaelestra Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
This is my kind of poetry - Thought provoking, philosophical, and clever... I love it. And I absolutely agree with your philosophy that life is what we make it. The world is what we've made it.
Just out of interest, have you ever studied 'Collective Conscience Theory?' It explains a lot :)
Anyway... wonderful work :)
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :iconbowplz:
I haven't studied collective consciousness in particular, although from time to time I stumble across the term in articles etc.
hopefully soon the time will come when people who care about where we're heading to will speak up, unfortunately this group remains silent most of the time but they should not, I believe it's the majority of population

thanx again :iconcip33:
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Michaelestra Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
I think that you're absolutely right. People are scared to speak up, I think. But until they do, nothing will change.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
spot on, my friend! :nod:
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Gothgirl145 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:love:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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Gothgirl145 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
^_^
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Beautiful. <3
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanx so much :tighthug:
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Welcome
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
From your author's comment: "once he asked me who I thought would win the fight over our world, our souls - good or evil?"

Much depends on how good and evil are defined, and by whom. Good and evil are not absolutes, not entities existing on their own.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you are right, there are many definitions and outlooks on this matter :nod: in this case good means peace and evil represents the suffering humans cast upon one another :)

thank you :iconflowerforyouplz:
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