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The Blind Man Dancing

May smooth curves of your lips be the pillow
On that my soul can rest in peace
Warmed by your breath, the only thing to lean on
When our human days run out of sun

In streets of town now emptied by cold drizzle
I saw there dancing a blind man
Who compared creator to narrator
And turned my longings into snowflakes

Sitting themselves down on shoulders of us both
Now closer to each other than ever, forever apart
Like dreams those came true long ago
Still haunting what is left of us after they left

Maybe he's right that love is born of decay
For sometimes it is nothing more
And still we keep it in our inner pockets
As "nothing more" is more than nothing; well, is it?

He said that he was frightened of my beauty
And he's the only one whose words are true
For what his orbs didn't see they cannot forget
He smiled and vanished in the wind which now I am dancing in
about how a beautiful soul touched my own :iconsnowflakesplz: a moment of perfection



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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student Writer
The character of the Blind Man intrigues me to no end! My one criticism: the final line could use a little work. "Which now I am dancing in" has the right tone, but the wording falters a bit.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you for your input :) I'm happy you enjoyed reading this poem
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Student Writer
This is lovely. I love the metaphor and the muse.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad to hear that, thank you :iconrainbowflowerplz:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Student Writer
You're really welcome!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The blind man in that respect was a cool, juxtaposed metaphor.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :D
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is pretty hardcore, describing one of those pure moments of inspiration and profound illumination.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I felt like that when writing this poem, I'm happy I could convey the emotion :la:
THANK YOU :hug:
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