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Ribcage Symphonies

Passion has no taste
It just burns your tongue
While fingers compose symphonies
On nameless ribcages

Black widows don't label their pets
Other than with dull numbers
Making disappointing engagements
Worthwhile episodes of a life wasted

On selfish charity, superiority
Damage of clarity of human heart
Dwelling frightened, cracked and murky
In its fragile shell

Soul is a carton box
That implodes in heavy rain
While rays of sun in a marmalade jar
Mean a miracle, if piled up carefully

A man says he met God in the subway
What most don't want to listen to
See, mirror is the one true friend
As it always smiles back

A horse's eye mutely reflects old days' glory
Unnoticed by those who just recklessly ride
Into sunset full of screaming colours
At dusk that for a change might not be followed by dawn
a mixture of love and fear, of hope and the fact that a big part of our life depends on our own attitude :lightbulb: enjoy :heart: and don't forget to smile back :]
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ArtByCher Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012   Traditional Artist
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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vikingjon Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012  Professional General Artist
:)
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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chryssalis Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
My god!You always amaze me,my dear Gabriela!!!This is fantastic!!!
"Soul is a carton box
That implodes in heavy rain" and
"See, mirror is the one true friend
As it always smiles back"
You are soooooo talented!!:wow:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought you'd like the part with the box :la: thank you for your support, princess :iconbouquetplz:
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chryssalis Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012
My great pleasure,my talented friend!:tighthug::love:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had to read it three times, because ıt is absolutely beautiful deep and it has a very strong sense of wisdom. You did a wonderful job on this poem my dear. :clap::clap:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: thank you very much, rainbow flower :iconrainbowflowerplz:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Professional General Artist
I would never forget to smile back...
especially when it comes to YOUR work.
:D :D

I love that last part when you use "A horse's eye..."
:nod:

Yup. Great analogy there. :heart:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
it appeared on my mind when I saw your recent photo... horses are very noble animals, they deserve respect :frail:

thank you :iconloveredplz:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional
Epic. Really, to contain that much in 24 lines, and what lines!

"While fingers compose symphonies
On nameless ribcages", "Worthwhile episodes of a life wasted"...A carton imploding in the rain and rays of sun in a jar..

I will end up quoting the whole poem, one that deserves to be read and read again. One I wish I could have written, completed by the comment you have written to accompany it...that our life depends on our attitude towards and within it. Very special.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconrainbowsqueeplz: you know, there was a time when I was writing just to vent and I wouldn't have shown my work to anyone because to me it was intimate and just the thought of doing that was making me feel uncomfortable... now it makes me so happy and it brings me satisfaction when I finish a poem and share it with friends (or with potential friends for that matter) and they tell me they feel touched by my words and find their own interpretations of my thoughts :iconcip33: I see the more I give, the more I get and each time makes me mature emotionally :heart:

thank you for your time and for sharing your thoughts with me :iconpancakeglompplz:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Professional
My pleasure. I know what you mean, I am the same in a way.

Writing is a personal expression but we can always write stuff that we keep to ourselves alongside the work that is published. I am glad you did not hide it all away, it is beautiful and Ribcage symphanies is such a brilliant piece. For some reason part of me always thinks of Bob Dylan lyrics when I read it! I think it is the use of symbolism and the rhythm of it. Seriously, one of my all time favourite poems ever. :tighthug:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconfireworkplz::iconpinklaplz::iconpinklaplz::iconpinklaplz::iconfireworkplz: Bob Dylan! :faint:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Professional
Your reply made me smile :D. I love..:faint:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
marmelade jars catching sunlight
I'm smiling :)(: and the mirror smiles me back. Yummy! sorry, I was remembering my childhood days, when my mother was cooking melons; tomatoes or quinces to later put into jars of sweet jam... I would stay with the wood spoon and the left overs... sweet memories!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
that's so sweet :iconiloveitplz: also my mom was doing that :la: and I'd be there everywhere chirping like a little sparrow and helping her :iconalesiandra:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
I helped mine measuring the sugar, washing the fruits and jars, she wouldn't allowed me near the stove, I can almost taste the lukewarm sweetness in my mouth again... Hummm!!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
There's a lot of food for thought in these sweet poetic lines! :heart:
Some lines that really stood out for me were
"While rays of sun in a marmalade jar
Mean a miracle, if piled up carefully"

I loved the imagery of these lines, and the truth of these
"mirror is the one true friend
As it always smiles back"
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconenglishrobinplz: thank you J E W E L :hug: if only we were able to make beautiful moments last, wouldn't it be cool? :icondancinglaplz:

as to the mirror :iconmirrorglompplz: I guess the best friends see us as we are... they don't need us perfect, they love us for just us :lightbulb:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Beautiful moments are often fleeting, but hopefully they will always re-occur.
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That's very true and such a beautiful thought too...the best friends see us as we are, they don't need us to be perfect, they just love us for us. That's beautiful! :heart: :glomp:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconlovepowerplz: :D :D :D
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simplecity8km Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
:)
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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simplecity8km Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
oh ..no..it hurts
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: hahahaha
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simplecity8km Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
i am a seeeeerious....person ..
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DarrenClarke Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
fantastic!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D thank you D A R R E N :iconlovepinkplz:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
Them bones, them bones, them xylophones.

My mirror never smiles back. I don't even look at it.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no wonder that your mirror won't smile when it's so lonely... anyway, here's a smile for you :iconyeeplz:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
That goes beyond 'smile'. Way waaaaaay beyoooooooond <[reverb] :D
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hahaha, I told myself a little of happy dance couldn't be bad... :iconhappehdanceplz:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
So true. :)
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