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Ubiquitous sense of failure
Drills holes into what was soul
Content, tranquil waterfall
That swallowed both ships and sailors

Moments of true pain brought panic
An acute need to restore
What once was, will be no more
Artificial, anorganic

Indecisive premonition
Blurs the simplest truth's reflex
Leaving blistered faith perplexed
For false prophet's recognition

Arrows wasted on star chasing
Just bare hands for self-defense
Sinner's zeal's the most immense
Eye-corners with wrinkles gracing
is it ever too late for making a change? I trust any time is the right time :iconhappysunplz:
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
You are one amazing writer...
and I trust that yes, anytime is probably good.
:D
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much T E A :iconbeauroseplz:

:sun: I like your optimism
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the whole flow, the rhyme of course ;) the message is really deep and emotional. Of course, never too late to make a change, just you need to believe you can do it :dalove:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very nicely said :clap: thank you very much S A I D A :iconbutterflyplz:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012
Go in and out... life in a crossroad full of traffic.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very nicely said :clap:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Glad you like it!
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Gothgirl145 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:love: Wonderful!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you miss :iconunicornglompplz:
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Gothgirl145 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional Writer
All we have are choices. Great poem!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THANK YOU :iconhappysunplz:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012
It's never too late to make a change in your life! All the power to you and yours...I especially loved the last stanza.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much for your support :iconfurryhugplz:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012
You're very welcome.
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YourBuddyBill Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Agreed.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :ninja:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Professional
How I feel right at this moment. Lovely words, adding this to favs. From a poetry technical point of view I just love the panic/anorganic rhyme.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm happy you liked and thank you for your kind words :D
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dman24993 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
If it is a change for the better. Any time is the right time.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you D A N :tighthug:
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dman24993 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome. :hug:
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