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Pretty As A Picture

Born as a spirit, shining elation
Clothed in a body, taught to feel shame
Shaped by prejudice and expectations
All in the name of civilisation
A nature savage needs to be tamed!

My surface polished by reservations
A pretty picture hung in golden frame
Fighting the dust; constant clarification
Nurtures misgivings, anticipation
Fear that in time nothing remains the same

Each crack and scratch brings me deliberation
Revives the longing my face to disclaim
My silence echoes with reverberation
Warns me from merciless retaliation
Of world that when beauty's gone forgets names
do you fear ageing? :iconscaredplz:



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cushla10 Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The poem was very well written.
The words you used set the reader a clear image of what the poem is saying.
I think many people can relate to what you're saying in the poem.

I ( this is just me I'm very young ) didn't fully understand exactly what the poem meant. I didn't fully get what all the words meant but, I think any reader can understand the jist of what you're saying.

Over all, I think this is a job well done!:iconyayzplz:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you kindly, I'm glad you enjoyed reading this poem :iconcuteflowerplz:

as to the meaning of the poem, the first stanza speaks of that each of us is born free and happy because there's no burden of social pressure as to what we "should" look like and act like - that comes with upbringing and social interaction; the secons stanza says once we give in to this pressure - the "need" to catch up on the "standards" dictated by society, we lose our freedom and become slaves of the hunt for eternal youth; the third stanza then comes to a conclusion that it feels liberating to finally find inner peace and live for true values and true friends instead of wasting time on worries about shallow interests

THANK YOU so much for your lovely comment :tighthug:
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cushla10 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Woah! This is really well written!
I LOVE it!!!!!!^^
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so very much :love:
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Professional General Artist
:wow:
Most brilliant!
I just love it... it's message is awesome, and it's excellently written. :clap:

I don't fear aging, itself, so much, no.

I have already experienced pain and disabilities since childhood, so because of this, I feel I have learned what is important, and being overly vain is not one of them. Sure it's okay to put on a little make up once in a while if you are going to go somewhere nice. It doesn't hurt to want to feel like you are making yourself look extra nice upon occasion, because it's something special, and each person should believe they are unique and special, and deserving to go out and do something fun every now and again, if possible.

But I am not someone who would ever do any surgeries to try and permanently make myself look younger... this is losing battle that I feel messes with ones mental image of ones physical self, and does not allow yourself to accept yourself as you are along the journey of what is your natural life. And what is wrong with what is your natural life?

It should be looked at and embraced, and every wrinkle, scar, and grey hair, is only a map to show the adventures and experiences of everything that has made you who you are in the current place you are in the journey where you are in that moment... why cover and change all of that?

Certainly in some instances, I respect a bit of balance in severe cases of scarring, but you know what I mean, I think. :)

Sorry to go on, but this was great. :heart:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you dear T E A for your wonderful comment :tighthug:

you perfectly summed up what I meant to say with this poem - often less is more and especially when it comes to people judging their physical self... each of us is given a face and a body but both of those are temporary and way too fragile for us to focus on just physical appearance
according to me there's no point in wasting hours on chasing minutes, it's nice to look neat but life is too short to be spent worrying about ageing :D

thank you again :blowkiss:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
I'm not afraid of getting old, of the riddles and wrinkles in my face .
I fear people that want to stay young by every means possible, and teach they're sons the same, they forget and ostracise the elderly.
Foolish and stupid, what are they going to do when age finally catch up to them? Who will love them, then? They're sons that they had teached to despise ageing?
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so true, my friend :hug:
I think those who fight this uneven battle with time become slaves of their own effort, although they don't know what they really want... it's about how one's mind is set, not about what the face looks like
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012
I hate too watch people with their faces altered and deformed by botox for example
They look like monsters most of the times.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
sadly they do :hmm:
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012
Yeah... it's sad.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A very beautiful poem. Again the rhyme is so neat. And to answer your question, not at all. Every age is a bless in its own.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconflowerplz: thank you S A I D A :iconluvluvplz:
I agree with you, each period of life is beautiful in its own way
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course :highfive:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I don't fear aging and I believe Beauty is timeless, and you're right Beauty forgets name...I don't think your poetry will ever grow old, but will continue to light up the world with its nurturing brilliance.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug: thank you so much J E W E L :D I see you will always be young in spirit, so I guess there's no need for you to fear :nod:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012
May we poets ever remain young in spirit, coloring the world with our written beauty.:tighthug:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
"Of world that when beauty's gone forgets names"

"do you fear ageing?"

I used to, but it's too late for that now. I find that when you get old, people just don't see you any more. In fact, I think that people don't pay attention to anyone of any age unless that person is what they want or has something they want.

What I really worry about is becoming too incapacitated to take care of myself. I would not like that at all.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You haven't met many reliable people, have you?
But I see what you mean, the concept of relationships is based on bonds beneficial for both (all) parties, that is understandable; the problem is many people forget to keep the profit "mutual" and just focus on what they can get for themselves - what in the first place casts them into emotional isolation

One of my favourite sayings sounds "In love you can win only if you're ready to share the victory", I don't think there's something such as "happiness for just one person" yes, one can be content on their own, but happiness needs to be shared

thank you very much for your comment :hug:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012
Very few.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So have I...
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