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At First Sight

Love at first sight
Gives you a right
To cross the street with eyes shut wide

Recklessly run
For having fun
Just to hand in hand come undone

Chest light with glee
Give smiles for free
On your affection's spending spree

For each sweet crime
You find a rhyme
Your only judge remains the time
a sweet little something :iconpinkheartplz: enjoy :]



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Zanerus Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A kind lyrical poem expressing love in a simple and carefree tone. Very nice to see such cheerfulness when most days are depressing.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :iconheartballoonplz: I agree with you, this world could use more smiles :iconcuteblushplz:
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Zanerus Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your very welcome ^^
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Zanerus Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry it enter too soon ^^. The line I like best is right in the start with "To cross the street with eyes shut wide" because to me it means complete trust and with all the crazy drivers I know pure insanity as well ^^ Good from start to finish.
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012  Student Writer
Very well written. The line that really stick out to me is "to cross the street with eyes shut wide." It sounds like it's contradicting itself, but is really actually quite a beautiful use of words and modern definitions of said words. Bravo!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much for your kind feedback :tighthug:
I'm happy you liked this piece :D
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Student Writer
Your very welcome!
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
Aw, wow, very good- :clap:
That last line, is super powerful! :heart:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
much obliged, thank you :bow:
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Daft-Enigma Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, I really like the first stanza!
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