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After The Rain

Soaked with holy rain
Of love you were making
To the shell that contains
The real me

Enraptured by your face's reflections
Gleaming in puddles resting
On my country's torso
I can't tell where you end

And I begin
Nor where these tears come from
And where sweet moments go to
When they say farewell

To what you left in me
And what you took away
Out of drawers
Those I didn't know I had at all
romantic mood :frail:


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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
Sweet!:heart: I would say though that "I can't tell where you end" and "And I begin" should be in the same stanza.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you for your suggestion :handshake: it was my intention to put an empty line where was said those two couldn't be parted or differed from one another :)
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angelichope Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
Okay!:)
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Student Writer
I really love the second stanza, beautiful :love:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww: thank you kindly :iconbeauroseplz:
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
I love the flow of this. You gotta love when people come together to the point of not knowing where one begins and ends.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
indeed! in my opinion love should take a sheet of paper (us) and fold it into an origami (show us new dimensions of perceiving the world) :iconpinklaplz:
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
I think love does a good job of doing that :D
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Gothgirl145 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Awesome job! I love it!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you kindly :iconifeelfluffyplz:
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